Meghan stood at the entrance of the church looking at the white flowers which had begun to wither prematurely. Her husband, egged on by his friends, had carried her down the steps. They had been together for a month when he was called away to the sea. He described the calm and stormy waters in detail, calling the sea his mother and best friend. Although a little sad, he was highly excited when called away to the sea. “I am going home”, he had told her. Meghan adjusted her black veil as she went in to attend the service.
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Meghan smiled at the colourful flowers and wondered if he would carry her down the steps or would be too tired to do so. Her fiancé had been called to the sea after their engagement. She thought about the fierce storm and six months of fear, wondering if he would come back. However, he was never in any doubt. He had called the sea his mother and best friend. His faith had been rewarded and he returned home, cherishing life and his loved ones. Meghan adjusted her white veil and took her dad’s arm as she entered the church.
These two stories were written for the Carrot Ranch Flash Fiction Challenge. Thank you, Charli.
Twofer! (It’s a contagion, this flashing.) Such different endings. Which do you prefer? (I’m leaning toward the white)
I like the happy one too:) Thank you so much, Avery
Oh wow two different stories. I of course like the second one. I’m a sucker for happy endings!! xo
Thank you, Amy:)
This is storytelling in its simplest form,, and you do it well.
Thank you kindly, Bill
What a great way to demonstrate your writing technique! While I like happy endings, I felt the shift in the first one as the new widow adjusts her veil to be powerful.
Thank you so much, charli. These prompts help us a lot to grow as writers. Cheers!
I liked the complementary stories…one dark and one light, nightlake. Way to go! ~nan
Thanks so much, Nancy, for the visit and the comment.
Love that you did two different takes on this. Of course, the happy ending is a lovely one, but I do like the feel of the one with the black veil – well done.
Although it is just a story, I felt a little upset after writing the first one. The second one is more cheerful. Thank you, Lisa, for reading and commenting.