I lay in the couch. A few people stood, still few wiping their eyes. My soul hovered around the room, restless, impatient and anxious. The man I loved stood on the porch, his face turned away from my body. Hardened by years, he displayed no emotion. My tortured soul was struck in the room, prepared to haunt the unloving earth for ever.
All of a sudden, he turned partly around. A lone tear, perhaps prompted by some distant memory, fell from his eyes. In that tear, my soul found eternal peace.
This was written for Ermilia’s Picture it & Write.
WOW! What a lovely imagery. The story is very gripping and powerful. Thanks for sharing my friend.
Thanks so much for this, Samina. I always appreciate your visits here
You are welcome my friend.
Powerful stuff… I loved this.. and even a happy ending…
Thank you so very much:)
Do you suppose this happens, the soul’s unrest until something in that instant, a single tear perhaps, sets it free? This was powerful Nightlake.
The narrator was longing for his love when she was alive and passes away with an unfulfilled wish. So, all her soul needs is a sign that at some point of time, he cared for her. Her wish fulfilled, she glides away. Thank you so much, LuAnn:)
Beautiful!
That is a wonderful piece on a difficult take.
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Thank you, Aesop:)
omgoodness, I got chills. so lovely Nightlake, just so lovely. Well done!
not exactly an uplifting story:) but I am so glad you liked it. Thank you, Cao:)
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This is pretty.
Thank you, Kim:)
Sensitive tale, beautifully crafted.
You are an extraordinary writer, with a subtly creative view of life.
Glad you appreciate this piece, Elephant. Thanks so much for the encouraging words
Beautiful. The power of knowing that someone has cared for you. That they loved you. A great short tale that was particularly powerful. Thanks for contributing this week! 🙂
– Ermisenda
Thank you very much, Ermilia:)
simply amazing!
Hi Sharmishtha, Thanks a lot:)
beautiful writing
Glad you appreciate it and thank you:)
Release at last – from the constraints of the earth.
Yes, and even to obtain that release, her soul needs a human emotion:) Thank you so much:)