Picture it & Write – A Movement


Max saw a movement in the river. “I saw a something moving in the river. Did you notice it?” he asked Pat. “Nope” said Pat, disinterestedly, munching some chips. He could not wait to get back to college. He had made a mistake in coming to this old town with Max and Mary. Max descended the rickety steps, which led to the river. What was that? A hand waved to him from the river. Max went closer, thrusting out his hand. But, the hand from the water had vanished. As he was about to turn back, the hand returned. It was not a wave, but a desperate plea for rescue. Max understood the urgency. Without further thought, he jumped inside. As Pat ate the last of his chips, there was no sign of Max. The river was abnormally calm.

This was written for Ermilia’s Picture it & Write.

28 thoughts on “Picture it & Write – A Movement

  1. Reminds me of one of the best endings I have ever read in a book. It is in the novel “Fabian, the story of a moralist” by the German author Erich Kästner. Fabian sees how a little boy falls into the river and (because he is a moralist) he jumps in to safe the boy. But: “The little boy swam back to the river bank, crying. Fabian drowned. Unfortunately he could not swim.»

  2. Oooohhh, What was that hand…? Was it a hand, or was it a supernatural phenomenon..? You have given your reader much room for pondering, my dear Padmini…. Very well done to you.. 🙂

  3. Eerie !! I often wonder how can you manage to create such excitement in such limited time !
    Your work is amazing and I always enjoy reading it. Great job, you are doing here 🙂

  4. Max was just kidding… he jumped in but hid himself for quite some minutes that he could hold his breath and then suddenly would popped up to scare Pat, who had been so anxious to get back to college 🙂

    Very exceptional kind of writing. I enjoyed reading it 🙂

  5. what the… damn him, why’d he jump >< i think max was just as desperate as that hand waving for help.. guess it reflected his desperation.. probably unhappy with his life. i love the unique, mysterious endings in your stories

  6. Pingback: PICTURE IT & WRITE – RELIVE ! | soumyav

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